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Emil Sinclair 🐣 ([personal profile] insinning) wrote in [community profile] dappledleaves 2023-07-18 09:06 am (UTC)

Canon Review Voice notes

Prologue:

Soft spoken, needs to be prodded by Rodya to introduce himself properly.
"I-Is...there anything else I need to say? I never worked for a company before..."
Youngest, the "kid", Rodya takes him under her wing so to speak, because she's the one with the least overt hangups (she kinda pokes at all the quiet ones)
Calls himself Sinclair, why does he not use his first name lfmasdpisdofi

(world stuff: Following the "star" is important. Demian mentions this as well in canto III. But what is the star? You need to engrave the aspect, but...

Was Demian always in the intro...

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